The second problem that I realized affected the quality of my essay is lack of topic sentence in the first paragraph of discussion. I began writing the discussion directly without providing the topic sentence. However, I could have improved the quality of my work by writing a topic sentence that basically would have stated the main idea and indicated the point I wished to make. The correct way to begin the paragraph would have been: There are various ways through, which body strength, muscle mass can be increased. one of the ways involves the use of Performance Enhancing Drugs such as anabolic steroids.
Another problem related that I recognized in my paper is wrong documentation, specifically wrong in-text citation. In my essay, there was no use of commas after the author’s name for instance: (Robinson 14). This should have been correctly written as. (Robinson, 14). In some cases, it can also be written as (Robinson, pg.14).
The fourth problem that I recognized in my essay is that that there is no concluding sentence in the first paragraph of the discussion. I failed to provide a brief discussion why Performance Enhancing Drugs should be banned in pro sports. However, I should have written this by indicating that: The use of Performance Enhancing Drugs such as steroids should be banned in pro sports. Apart from the health side effects that are usually posted by PED’s on athletes, their use on pro sports reduces the essence of the natural nature of these sports.
Consequently, in the last paragraph is there is no topic sentence that would have introduced the main idea of that topic. This can be corrected by simply writing a topic sentence for instance: The use of Performance Enhancing Drugs creates a sense of unfair wins among players raising the question with regard to the legality of their victory. Moreover, the paragraph had wrong documentation for instance: (Robinson 29).